What do you think of this poem?

What is it that you like and what is it that you hate?

What is the heart you fake and what keeps you straight.

So much patience so far, man what’s causing you to wait.

Temptations in debate

Every time you see her face.

Temptations in the heart done let that boy go astray.

Just saw a girl with some big ones are they real or are they fake

Opps keep a pure mind dog…come on Khalid lower your gaze.

But I say I was doing a vision check to make sure I wasn’t gay.

Kicked it in the crib got the remote a pushed play.

Islamic dvd in the player, what they had to say?

man talking bout Jenna..boy, betta keep yo mind straight.

Don’t stare at pretty girls, keep them hormones in delay.

Cause if Jenna was to meet you, you’ll regret it on that day.

When it stares you in your face.

That’ll be a regretful day.

idk..just decided to write a little today

pretty damn good, my friend. pretty damn good.

6 Responses to “What do you think of this poem?”

  1. Keep writing bro,
    Women are beautiful and they are worthy of poetry!
    It is ‘forbidden’ to look at them with desire, but its not forbidden to think abou t them!
    Nothing wrong in that!

    Nice job brother,
    May i suggest a bit more compact with more powerful ‘emotions’ or ‘inner desire’.

    Great job!
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    ‘Temptations in the heart done let that boy go astray.’ <3 that!

  2. pretty damn good, my friend. pretty damn good.
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  3. HEY!!! i will MARRIED to a woman that i can only afford..
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  4. what u said in ur poem is true loll
    like the message about lowering ur gaze
    nice bro very nice:)
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  5. Wazeer the Unity fan on April 28th, 2010 at 3:19 pm

    Ok
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  6. NYC-212s 1st Lady is Moonlight on April 28th, 2010 at 4:03 pm

    Nice bro
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